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帮我改下初中的英语作文,
I don't want to grow up
i'm 15 years old now,I look like other students ,so busy,I have too homework to do
and don't have enough time to play with friends .
one day ,I dream abrout my kid's time
in a park,I play with my friends ,we all enjoy it
we haven't any homework ,and needn't study all day
later,I back home ,panrents don't to criticize me .and I hvae many time to enjoy the
lunch ,and i can watch cartoonsat home ,it's so funny .
evening ,i can go to bed after 10 o'clock
the next day ,i can get up at noon.and i can see sky ,ican see sea.
i go to amusement park ,i only need to pay for half-price ticket and even need't pay for any thing
so,i can enjoy any amusement park.it's so happy and fun
just now ,my alarm clock is ring ,oh ,it's just a dream .
next ,i have a quick breakfast ,it's 7 o'clock .I was always late for school,today.too
next,i go to teacher's office ,it's too bad .
then,i start to siwm at the sea of books ,i don't want to grow up
god ,please help me ,help me
I don't want to grow up
i'm 15 years old now,I look like other students ,so busy,I have too homework to do
and don't have enough time to play with friends .
one day ,I dream abrout my kid's time
in a park,I play with my friends ,we all enjoy it
we haven't any homework ,and needn't study all day
later,I back home ,panrents don't to criticize me .and I hvae many time to enjoy the
lunch ,and i can watch cartoonsat home ,it's so funny .
evening ,i can go to bed after 10 o'clock
the next day ,i can get up at noon.and i can see sky ,ican see sea.
i go to amusement park ,i only need to pay for half-price ticket and even need't pay for any thing
so,i can enjoy any amusement park.it's so happy and fun
just now ,my alarm clock is ring ,oh ,it's just a dream .
next ,i have a quick breakfast ,it's 7 o'clock .I was always late for school,today.too
next,i go to teacher's office ,it's too bad .
then,i start to siwm at the sea of books ,i don't want to grow up
god ,please help me ,help me
i'm 15 years old now,I look like (look like 是看起来像,不太合适,可以用be like)other students ,so busy（这个用法好像不对.）,I have too（应该加一个much） homework to do
and don't have enough time to play with friends .
one day ,I dream（应该是过去式,） abrout（拼错了.） my kid's （kid’s不对.kid是孩子.如果你想说童年应该是childhood.而且你的下文写的没有作业什么的是不是不切实际?你这里的意思应该是你真正经历过的童年的时间）time
in a park,I play with my friends ,we all enjoy it（应该是过去式吧）
we haven't（应该是don't have） any homework ,and needn't study all day
later,I （应该加一个动词came.）back home ,panrents（应该是my parents.单词拼错了parents） don't to （应该是didn't.没有to）criticize me .and I hvae（应该是had） many（应该是much.因为time不可数.many修饰可数名词） time to enjoy the
lunch ,and i can（应该could） watch cartoonsat（注意空格.） home ,it's so funny（funny放这里有点不恰当.这个词有点“滑稽的”的意思.换成relaxing什么的应该好些吧.） .
（in the 或者直接用at night.反正不能直接evening）evening ,i can（could） go to bed after 10 o'clock
the next day ,i can（could） get up at noon.and i can see sky ,ican see sea（应该需要加the.而且句子有点不顺.）.
i go to amusement park ,i only need to pay for half-price ticket and even need't pay for（pay for 的意思是为什么而支付.后面跟的是你买的东西而不是花的东西.这里应该用spend） any thing
,i can enjoy any amusement park（t如果你的意思是任何游乐园应该加s）.it's so happy and fun
just now ,my alarm clock is ring（应该是rang.因为是just now 应该用过去式.注意不要加is） ,oh ,it's just a dream .
next ,i have a quick breakfast ,it's 7 o'clock .I was（always的话就用一般现在时.用am就行） always late for school,today.too（应该是我今天又迟到了.这个用法应该不对）
nex（上文有个next就不要再next了）t,i go to teacher's office ,it's too bad .
then,i start to siwm at the sea of books ,i don't want to grow up
god ,please help me ,help me
PS：可能有错误地方.我也初中.见谅.看在打了那么多字的份上.
and don't have enough time to play with friends .
one day ,I dream（应该是过去式,） abrout（拼错了.） my kid's （kid’s不对.kid是孩子.如果你想说童年应该是childhood.而且你的下文写的没有作业什么的是不是不切实际?你这里的意思应该是你真正经历过的童年的时间）time
in a park,I play with my friends ,we all enjoy it（应该是过去式吧）
we haven't（应该是don't have） any homework ,and needn't study all day
later,I （应该加一个动词came.）back home ,panrents（应该是my parents.单词拼错了parents） don't to （应该是didn't.没有to）criticize me .and I hvae（应该是had） many（应该是much.因为time不可数.many修饰可数名词） time to enjoy the
lunch ,and i can（应该could） watch cartoonsat（注意空格.） home ,it's so funny（funny放这里有点不恰当.这个词有点“滑稽的”的意思.换成relaxing什么的应该好些吧.） .
（in the 或者直接用at night.反正不能直接evening）evening ,i can（could） go to bed after 10 o'clock
the next day ,i can（could） get up at noon.and i can see sky ,ican see sea（应该需要加the.而且句子有点不顺.）.
i go to amusement park ,i only need to pay for half-price ticket and even need't pay for（pay for 的意思是为什么而支付.后面跟的是你买的东西而不是花的东西.这里应该用spend） any thing
,i can enjoy any amusement park（t如果你的意思是任何游乐园应该加s）.it's so happy and fun
just now ,my alarm clock is ring（应该是rang.因为是just now 应该用过去式.注意不要加is） ,oh ,it's just a dream .
next ,i have a quick breakfast ,it's 7 o'clock .I was（always的话就用一般现在时.用am就行） always late for school,today.too（应该是我今天又迟到了.这个用法应该不对）
nex（上文有个next就不要再next了）t,i go to teacher's office ,it's too bad .
then,i start to siwm at the sea of books ,i don't want to grow up
god ,please help me ,help me
PS：可能有错误地方.我也初中.见谅.看在打了那么多字的份上.