我写了两篇英文作文,提些建议.

我写了两篇英文作文,提些建议.
第一篇.My life in 15 years
"What your life will be like when you grow up?"Our teacher asked us in a class meeting.After a minute silence .He asked me to say it first."I just want to help those who need help.Make poor children get home ,make poor children get education."Since then,suddenly I found I never thought about my future ,I need to think about my future life.No child dreaming,NO fairy tales.A real and ture life.
I like history .Especially Chinese history.When I am thirty,I will be a archaeologist .If I could see bronze in Shang dynasty,chinese in Song dynasty ,silk in Tang dynasty.I would be crazy about these.There are still many mysteries in Chinese history.I could research the truths or mistakes .It's fantastic,though sometimes it might be dangerous.But if I could get this job,nothing could stop my steps.
When I am 30.Maybe I would have a family.I would adopt one or two kids and bring them up.In vacation ,I will take them to travel.No more class,No more pressure.They will feel happy in their childhood.I would have a happy famliy with a handsome and responsible husband and lovely kids.
When I am 30,I would be a philanthropist.I would give one-third of my money to the charity.I want to help homeless children and poor people.i think one of the greatest value lies in his devotion to the community.Though my power is limited,I will try my best to appeal to more people help others.
I want my life will be like this in fifteen years.I believe it will not be just a dream.I will try my best to get it .No pans ,no gains.The great effort will help the one to reach the goal.No matter how hard it will be.i always believe.
第二篇是 Hou to prepare for final examination
Everybody has his or her own way to study.A good way might help you get much time to do other things you like.It also can help you to get good grades in final examination.Some people think intelligence and afford are two important points.But I thind a suitable ways is the nost important.so,here I want to tell you how I am prepare for final examination.
In the world ,final examination may be the annoying thing for students.We study all day and night in order to get a exam paper ,only one report decide how well you studied in this term.sometimes we worries about this,but if we could think another way.I believe there will be a good side of exam."It just a test,I could know my advantages and disadvantages from it.maybe I should like it."Everytime before final exam I will tell this to myself.So I could be calm down and sleep well .A good altitude really helps me a lot.
I never reviews science before exam.No more exercise book,no more theorems.If I have difficulties in science I will ask teachers after class,but bot before exam.It's not uesful to me .SO I think listen carefully in class is enough.

Make poor children get home ,make poor children get education.
Making poor children get home ,making poor children get education.
或者在make前加to
如果不这么做的话就成祈使句了