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criticism my essay and find grammar problem
My Own Earth,My Own World
If I were the last person left on earth,how would I spend my time?Why I want to do this thing.Is that interesting or important to me?
If I were the last person left on earth,I can do everything I want to do and I will have many ways to spend my times.
In morning I will drive different cars,especially the rate cars.When I do not like the car anymore,I will break the car and try to fly an airplane or battle plane.I want to fly an airplane or battle plane because I never try it in my life.
In evening I will sleep at one house,but when I wake up,I will break down the house.So I will go to another house to sleep and break down another house,until I break down all the houses on the earth.The reason I want to sleep in different house and break the house because they are all mine.Originally the houses are not mine,but I am the last person on earth.So they are all mine right now.
If I were the last person left on earth,I think I will travel around the world.I think go to different country was so interesting and I always want to live in different place.
If I were the last person left on earth,I will do every carry things.Because I was the last person on earth,everything on the earth is mine.I want to try different thing every day and when I already tried I want to break it.If I was not the last person on earth,I cannot to do these carry things.Basically I am a carry guy.I want to do all carry guy if just only me on earth.
criticism my essay and find grammar problem
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If I were the last person left on earth,how would I spend my time?Why I want to do this thing.(此处句号改成问号) Is that interesting or important to me?
If I were the last person left on earth,I can do everything I want to do and I will have many ways to spend my times(此处times改成time,因为time是不可数名词).
In morning I will drive different cars,especially the rate cars.When I do not like the car anymore,I will break the car and try to fly an airplane(此处“开飞机”改成operate an airplane) or battle plane.I want to fly an airplane(同上) or battle plane because I never try it in my life.
In evening I will sleep at one house(改成sleep in a house),but when I wake up,I will break down the house.So I will go to another house to sleep and break down another house,until I break down all the houses on the earth.The reason I want to sleep in different house(改成houses) and break the house(同上) because they are all mine.Originally the houses are not mine,but I am the last person on earth.So they are all mine right now.
If I were the last person left on earth,I think I will travel around the world.I think go to different country(改成countries) was(改成were) so interesting and I always want to live in different place(改成places).
If I were the last person left on earth,I will do every carry things.Because I was the last person on earth,everything on the earth is mine.I want to try different thing every day and when I already tried I want to break it.If I was not the last person on earth,I cannot to do these carry things.Basically I am a carry guy.I want to do all carry guy if just only me on earth.
下面的一段,我就不改了,你的单复数要仔细多看,文章当中很多单复数都没注意到,下面一段有很过错误.另外,你的这篇文章内容写的并不太好哦.