搜搜做题作业网英语：请各位老师点评一下我这篇作文（初中的）
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英语：请各位老师点评一下我这篇作文（初中的）
题目：现在学生上网（get online）成风，你班下周要举行一次主题班会，谈一谈学生上网的利和弊。请根据下面所提供的内容，写一篇演讲稿。词数：80
益处：1.学会使用现代化的设备——电脑；2.学习更多有用的知识；3.玩电脑游戏能使人头脑灵活、聪明。
敝处：1.过度沉迷于电脑游戏；2.上网浪费大量的时间；3.学习成绩下降，丧失学习兴趣。
建议：1.在学习期间不上网；2.寒暑假期间可以上网
Pros and cons of getting online
Boys and girls.Most of you are getting online now.It has many pros and cons
For instance,learn to get online can learn to wse the modern operation----computer.You can learn more knowledgeables by getting online.It can make you be more clever.But ifyou spend most time on it,you'd fall in love with computer games especally more and more time may be lost.Not only that,but your habit of studying will be lost and get fewer grades.There are some advice to this things:
1.Don't get online during the school time
2.Yyoucan get online when you have long vacation such as winter vacation and summer vacation
满分100分我能得几分？顺便点评一下整篇作文，下次该怎么写。在此谢过
题目：现在学生上网（get online）成风，你班下周要举行一次主题班会，谈一谈学生上网的利和弊。请根据下面所提供的内容，写一篇演讲稿。词数：80
益处：1.学会使用现代化的设备——电脑；2.学习更多有用的知识；3.玩电脑游戏能使人头脑灵活、聪明。
敝处：1.过度沉迷于电脑游戏；2.上网浪费大量的时间；3.学习成绩下降，丧失学习兴趣。
建议：1.在学习期间不上网；2.寒暑假期间可以上网
Pros and cons of getting online
Boys and girls.Most of you are getting online now.It has many pros and cons
For instance,learn to get online can learn to wse the modern operation----computer.You can learn more knowledgeables by getting online.It can make you be more clever.But ifyou spend most time on it,you'd fall in love with computer games especally more and more time may be lost.Not only that,but your habit of studying will be lost and get fewer grades.There are some advice to this things:
1.Don't get online during the school time
2.Yyoucan get online when you have long vacation such as winter vacation and summer vacation
满分100分我能得几分？顺便点评一下整篇作文，下次该怎么写。在此谢过
50-60分之间，你该不会是直接将中文翻绎成英文吧？在该用noun的字，你却用了adjective。而且你要留意句子的最基本结构：SOV ，即是subject+ verb + object 。例如：I (subject ) love (verb ) you (object )，你不能说I lovely you 啊！你现在应练好这一个，到熟了，可以了就能尝试其他的新玩法了！加油啊！还有，在逻辑性方面也要加强啊！！